Budding Meet

(at the end see analysis by Wani Nazir. A poet and gold medalist. Author of a poetic anthology"and the silence whispered")

Half night;sleep sick eyes,
Fox wail coming at end plains ,
The night is in its darkest rage,
I remember, in these gloom worn eyes,
Our first love meet at a cute inn.

Between vernal flowers(man made),
Ornamental furniture , soothing light
We felt earliest rays of love,
Splitting ,as love of ombre,
Tender in the womb.

Shuddering she gushed,
In few erotic gestures,
Her maiden love speech,
A mute listener, I looked
Her all gaze in wonder!

In the dead dark night,
(Of such brief memory)
The idyllic flashback fades away;
Leads me to vex under tearful eyes,
Bid her adiue by amorous sighs

Analysis by Wani Nazir.
"The poem is a poem in which the poet has amalgated both the sensual and the erotic to produce a neo-platonic view of amours de voyage. The poet has cleverly employed metaphysical conceits albeit the poem cannot reach the state of Metaphysical poetry. Metaphysical conceit as Samuel Johnson in 'Life of Cowley' advocates 'is of discordia concros;a combination of disimiliar images or discovery of occult,resembles in things apparently unlike,the most heterogeneous elements are yoked by violence together.'
The poem echoes John Donne's poem "To His Mistress Going to Bed'. The poet too has employed Petrarchan conceits, marked by energetic, often bawdy wit, a new explicitness about desire and experience. Several poetic conventions, such as personification(Night is in darkest rage) , transfered epithet (sleep his sick eyes) and literary allusion(shudder alludes to the line in Leda and Swan, 'Shudder in the loins...), metaphors(like wailing of fox) have been used here. Ornamental furniture,love of ombre and other far-fetched images have provide the poem the colour and dexterity of a true amorous poem.
The poem comprises four stanzas. The poem opens with a tone of love melancholy; we see the speaker struggling with the bewitching power of night, lulling him into a treacherous sleep. In this stanza, the poet mentions the enticement of sleep that strives to overtake the speaker, but the poet is at war with the sleep employing the tone of a mock epic poem. Here war is being fought without any arms. The speaker has seen some fair damsel in his waking sleep,perhaps his beloved.
In the second stanza,the speaker is seen waving off the curtains. The darkness has gone. The underworld has been lit by the appearance of his beloved. Now the black wisps are not hovering. The beauty of his beloved is exposed. In the third stanza,we see the tone changes completely, a shift from platonic love to amorous one. The anima has escaped and now the union between flesh has come into play. We find echoes of the eroticism found in Yeats' poem "The Leda and the Swan".
"A shudder in the loins engenders there
The broken wall, the burning roof and tower
And Agamemnon dead."

In the concluding stanza, we see the poet employing the tool of "aubade", even though the speaker is parting away at night.
The poet is beset with anxious thoughts that his beloved is leaving the stage of amours de voyage and is seen throbbing​ his chest​.In this last stanza,the poet employs an elegaic tone as his beloved is seen fading away from his watered eyes.

If the punctuation marks had been put in place, and more work been done on structure and choice of words, the poem would have been understandable to more readers. Anyways, it is an excellent poem. Kudos to the poet. Wish him an efulgent writing career!